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Which entry is best?

1st entry
- 1 (1.8%)
2nd entry
- 5 (9.1%)
3rd entry
- 1 (1.8%)
4th entry
- 11 (20%)
5th entry
- 12 (21.8%)
6th entry
- 4 (7.3%)
7th entry
- 21 (38.2%)

Total Members Voted: 55

Voting closed: January 18, 2011, 08:56:32 pm


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Author Topic: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!  (Read 9378 times)

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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #15 on: January 14, 2011, 12:22:50 am »

Don't say what you voted for. There'll be no suprise.
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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #16 on: January 14, 2011, 06:06:25 am »

I like number 7 the most cuz it is a more realistic view, and written well.
By realistic i mean it not mention vaults, alsaka fallout stuff.

But number 2 is more fitting, and when read seems to have more flow.

Hard choice for me, but i go number 7. but it needs to end with war....war never changes.
 
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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #17 on: January 14, 2011, 09:34:33 am »

Voted for number 7.
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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #18 on: January 16, 2011, 04:06:21 am »

Number 4 is extremely well written, and is lengthy which shows more effort. 4 is the way to go
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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #19 on: January 16, 2011, 06:35:15 am »

I like the 5th a lot, but i would put it rather in the begining of the game manual. I think that writer has much more to say, than can fit in short intro.

And i really can not decide between 2th and 7th. They are both just great, expressing very accurately the feeling of the world, that the player is thrown in. Maybe those writers should work together?

Also i think that there should be a second round, with say 3 best entries. And give authors some time to correct and improve their work.

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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #20 on: January 16, 2011, 10:51:03 am »

i will add this, but i do not wanna participate:

War, war never changes... from the dawn of humanity small tribes where atacking ech other to get there food, wather and women. Today nothing changed, only the weapons, the scale and the loot. But war never changes...
In the year 2077 America was winning the great war, but there coward enemies launched all the bombs they got, making America a deserted wasteland, but allmoast all the population took shelter in great underground vaults so they can repopulate what was one, the great America.
In the year 2238, war took other form. Since there was not much urified wather, moast of the wastelanders sufered from intence dehydration, making them think tehy got killed in the worst ways they can imagine, but allways wakeing saved by some nive people from the wasteland. Some of them thinked they are invincible, so they started to raid caravans, patrools and other cityes, since they will allways wake up somewhere in the wasteland with just some easy to heal wounds, they started to kill with no fear of ever dieing. Moast of them organized im powerfull gangs that whants to help or to kill the poor wastelanders that just whant to survive.
Since no one can die, the fights will be endless, making this an ethernal war. But war, war never changes...

si not spell checked, can some one spell check it?(this is not an entry for the competition, this is what i think about the game)

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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #21 on: January 16, 2011, 11:35:36 am »

Lag here's a voting thread, no?
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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #22 on: January 17, 2011, 09:25:01 pm »

Lag here's a voting thread, no?
well, whanted to post this somewhere, and if i made new topic than surf will come and tell some shity stuff and brah blah blahs and delete or move my monologe

so i find this here fitting just right, no Surf?
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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #23 on: January 18, 2011, 10:40:26 pm »

While you care about trollin' and tree controls, you've missed something creative. 7th entry won! Congratulations to author.
Well... my shit is placed 5th. (6th entry)  Not bad for work with serious plot mistake.
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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #24 on: January 18, 2011, 10:42:40 pm »

What did i tell you guys?  8)
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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #25 on: January 19, 2011, 08:08:48 pm »

gotta make the next contest jury-based.

But yes, otherwise I agree. I mean, who cares about feeling for language anyway?

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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #26 on: January 19, 2011, 08:31:11 pm »

Personally, I don't like the "What will you do" at the end. Sounds too... lacking substance? I hope people didn't pick it solely because it was short (and that last option that would get most attention ;p). But maybe some sort of collaboration between the 1st place one and the 2nd place one would be nice.
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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #27 on: January 19, 2011, 09:08:50 pm »

I also didn't like the "what Will you Do" part but by then it was too late too make changes.  I wanted to keep it short and succent to distinguish it from the originals, though in hindsight I could have added in a tiny bit more and re-arranged how it all flowed.

War, War never changes.  Although it is unclear who fired first, the results could not have been more transparent.  In the span of mere moments, the actions of a few, changed the course of history, and the world.  Civilisation was almost annihilated, scourged by a great fire and radiation.  Some of the survivors believed it was retribution, an act of god, for the sins of mankind.  Others believed in a far more simpler explanation, human nature itself.  Regardless, humanity managed to pick itself up from the ashes of the nuclear holocaust and rebuild.  For a time it was good, but like man, war never changes.  In 2238, the law of the wastes could be summed up in one simple phrase, "The wasteland is harsh".  Hatred, greed, paranoia, age old human concepts, again pre-vailed.  Fanatics who believed themselves chosen and protected by their gods, a united army of rogues, and those of the banner of the dot, were just some who roamed the wastes, taking as they pleased.  Yet there were others who stood in their way.  A coalition of soldiers who turned a long lost word into a symbol.  These armed legal arbitrators, along with their allies, the VSB, brought back justice and humanity to the wastes.  It is a time of tremendous good, and great evil.  Allies and enemies, like ideaologies, continually shift and change.  Humanity will once again be forced to decide whether to save, or doom itself.
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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #28 on: January 20, 2011, 10:29:36 pm »

^That text sounds a lot better but it still has these terms and phrases in there that are probably word to word translations and don't actually exist in english. Plus, there still are some syntax and punctuation issues.

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Re: [Contest] Monologue script for FO2238 Intro - Voting thread!
« Reply #29 on: January 20, 2011, 11:31:55 pm »

^That text sounds a lot better but it still has these terms and phrases in there that are probably word to word translations and don't actually exist in english.

Uh, which?

Besides, I don't think it's a good idea to include references to actual ingame Gangs or such in that, Keldorn. ;)
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