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Josh:

--- Quote from: Eddie Haskel on November 05, 2011, 08:52:58 PM ---And in the junkyard, the girl looking to recycle BBs and spears, says:

"Well if your bored, spears make great recyclables, and we can use them for pretty much anything around here.  I'd be happy to buy some off you for 50 caps a spear, or 60 caps for a sharpened spear."

Should read:

"Well if you're bored, spears make great recyclables, and we can use them for pretty much anything around here.  I'd be happy to buy some of you for 50 caps a spear, or 60 caps for a sharpened spear.

--- End quote ---
the first one is grammatically correct, the modified one would only be right if it was "buy some of yours."

Slaver Snipe:
Actually the first one is not grammatically correct, it should indeed be "Well if you're bored" instead of "Well if your bored" but the second part of it is fine.

kraskish:

--- Quote from: Eddie Haskel on November 05, 2011, 04:31:00 PM ---Should read (for better understanding):

"You have learned to pack your equipment better. Now the manipulation of your items in your inventory are 50% faster."

--- End quote ---

Shouldn't it be:

"You have learned to pack your equipment better. Now the MANIPULATION of your items in your inventory IS 50% faster."

Swinglinered:

--- Quote from: Eddie Haskel on November 05, 2011, 04:31:00 PM --- There should be a section specifically for rewrites.  I looked, but didn't see one.

A fix needed:

On the Quick Pockets perk, it says:
"You have learned to pack your equipment better. Now the manipulation of the items in the inventory are 2x smaller."

Should read (for better understanding):

"You have learned to pack your equipment better. Now the manipulation of your items in your inventory are 50% faster."

--- End quote ---

Or just say that "AP costs for manipulating inventory items are halved".

I wonder if this applies to Using items from inventory.
(More whacks with sledge in same amount of time for faster mining, but minus the time to access it that way relative to using an item from the Active Slot).

Grommok:

--- Quote from: Swinglinered on November 06, 2011, 12:28:30 AM ---Or just say that "AP costs for manipulating inventory items are halved".

--- End quote ---
Reduced by half. Easier to understand for those ones that dont have english as native language (like me ;D)

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